The conclusion is the
second most important part of your essay, after the introduction. Just as
the introduction had the primary purpose of drawing the reader in, the
conclusion’s foremost function should be to leave the reader with a
lasting impression. This section will offer guidelines on how to maximize
the impact of that impression. These guidelines can be grouped into three
categories, each of which encompasses a lesson of what not to do.
Don't Summarize. Synthesize.
The
chief difference between these two tactics is that the latter deals with
themes while the former deals with facts and experiences, though there is some
overlap. You do not need to recap the essay paragraph by paragraph. You do not
need to remind the reader of the experiences you discussed (except as
individual experiences might be tied to certain themes you want to
synthesize).
On
the other hand, you
do want to reiterate key themes, but preferably not in a way that merely
repeats them. Ideally, the process of synthesizing them will add a fresh
perspective. Try to tie themes together and demonstrate how they complement
each other. Of course, you should stay away here—as always—from trite and
clichéd generalizations.
One
way to add a strong sense of closure is to invoke your introduction
in the process of synthesizing. There are a number of different ways this could be
accomplished. You might complete a story you started in the introduction, or
you might show how something has changed in your present since the timeframe
of the introduction.
One
applicant used his essay to relate personal characteristics through a
child’s toy, Lego building blocks. He does not involve any overstatement
about how Legos have dramatically changed his life. Instead, he uses his unique
theme to showcase how he has become a mature young man—and a strong college
applicant:
“Legos
may not have changed the world the way the airplane and the computer have, but
for one little boy, they accomplished what no incredible piece of technology
could do. They released an unstoppable flow of imagination and curiosity that
has shaped the boy into a creative, energetic, and confident young man.”
Expand on Broader Significance
One
way to ensure that your last paragraph has something fresh to say is to tie
your ideas to some broader implications, whether about yourself or your field.
However, do not get carried away: Some applicants think they have to make
reference to saving the world or derive some grand philosophical truths from
their experiences. Stay grounded and focused on your personal details, as this
applicant does:
“I
cautiously placed my Star of David necklace around my neck as I once again boarded a plane
to leave for Jonquiere, Quebec. For the following six weeks, I
studied in a country where few people knew of the Jewish religion, and where
those who looked at my necklace noticed it only for its beauty. Classmates in
my courses knew of Judaism solely through stereotypes from television. For
many, I was the first Jew they had met. I spoke less of my faith as a Jew, yet
noticed its impact on me more. My necklace was my identity. I pulled it from
underneath my shirt and placed it on the outside of my clothing, not caring if
the diamond side faced forward.”
Avoid Adding Entirely New Information, Except to
Look Ahead
We
have used the word “fresh” several times here, but this is not an
invitation to insert whole new experiences into the conclusion. The
notion of freshness applies to perspectives and ideas, but you should avoid adding entirely new information
in the conclusion. In shorter essays, you might have to pack details in
everywhere, but in general, if it is an important experience, it should come
earlier.
That
said, speaking of goals in your conclusion is a strong way to end. Some essays
will be chiefly about the writers’ qualifications and intentions, but they
will not touch on specific goals until all of that has been established. The
delineation of goals can be like a process of synthesizing, because you are
trying to tie your themes together in the context of where you will go next.
This
applicant closes by emphasizing how important music is in his life and by
relating that he wants to share his gift with others. The essay has been
building toward such a conclusion, so it is fitting:
“I
hope to continue performing and studying music after high school. One of my
band members met Sean Lennon last week while in the Village and said that Sean
was very interested in hearing the demo we will be finishing in late
November. Just the opportunity to present my music to a larger audience makes
me realize how deeply I want to share the positive experience music has been
in my life. Every time I make a new film, DJ a radio show, or record music
with my band, I hope to promulgate music that will inspire other people to
listen closely to the music that surrounds and impacts their lives.”
You
may also want to make reference to the specific schools to which you are
applying (some questions will ask why you want to attend). This information
can come earlier, but it is not unacceptable to bring it up in the conclusion.
Move
on to Lesson Six: Editing and Revising